‘the cat and the mouse’ – my first story (probably)


Mom went through some of her old papers this morning.  In her yearly planner from 2005, she found what appears to be the first story I ever wrote (I would’ve been six or seven).  To preserve this historic document, I thought I’d share pictures (yes, there were illustrations because what little kid writes a story without illustrations?) and an easy-to-read transcript of the story itself. (I preserved all my delightful spelling and grammatical errors for the world to see.)

Oh, and in her 2004 planner she discovered a list of books I’d read that year.  They included the All of a Kind Family series, the Little House series (Laura Ingalls Wilder), and the Sadie Rose series.  Which is *cough* impressive for a six or five year old.  But what really made my day was the note Mom put after the list…“Too many books to count”.  YASSSSS.

But anyway.  To get back to The First Piece of Fiction that Eva Ever Wrote.

The cat and the mouse.

By Eva-Joy

The cat was with a shoe….. [I put the first line on the front cover.  AUTHORS SHOULD ACTUALLY DO THIS, Y’ALL.]

And it saw a mouse. It ran after it almost had it when it went into a hole. the cat was sad but it could not git in [repeat: all mistakes have been carefully preserved]

The cat angry that the mouse have gottin away. It thoute I will get it next time so it sat at the hole and wiated, and wiated, and wiated. [I am so proud of Little Eva using the Oxford Comma before she even knew what it was.] But it did not come out. Why dos’ent it come out. The mouse was smart. [The mouse is my favorite character in this story.  He was smart.]

[The End]


You guys.  Despite its obvious juvenile failings, this little story makes me so happy.  Even back then, I was a writer!  From that story I graduated to co-authored ‘novels’ with my oldest brother. (The oldest siblings in our stories always had to be twins – a boy and a girl – so that there would be gender equality.  Very important to nine and eleven year olds.)  Then I wrote horrible Regency fiction. (Inspired by Jane Austen.)  Then medieval stuff.  Then a dystopian trilogy.  And so on, until I’m here, twenty years old, actively working toward traditional publication.


It’s a good feeling.

And just for the record, here’s a snippet of my current WIP, The Darkness is Past.  It’ll make the comparison between my old and new writing complete.

“You’re bleeding,” Lukas said and shoved the twisted life jacket away from Sol’s shoulder. His long fingers probed the wound.

“One of the guards…he’s worse,” Sol said.

“Keep some snow on it,” Lukas said, bending down and pressing a handful of the stuff into his hands.

Sol brought it to his shoulder, gasping when the fiery cold seeped into his wound. His heart pounded from the pain. The cold.

Lukas came out of the hovercraft, supporting the bloody, unconscious guard.

Julius followed a few steps behind, carrying two bundles of supplies in his hand.

Blood water ran between Sol’s fingers. -Chapter Sixteen

So tell me: have you ever discovered pieces of your old writing?  Were they good or bad?  And isn’t it awesome, being able to see how far we’ve come?



6 thoughts on “‘the cat and the mouse’ – my first story (probably)

  1. Awwwwwwww. I definitely wrote tiny things like this at that age, and I know my parents have some of them somewhere. Next time I’m there, I’ll have to see if Mom can find some to share. Love this idea!


  2. “The mouse was smart” – that’s more character development than anything I gave my characters in my earliest works of writing. Also, little Eva was clearly better at grammar than at spelling.

    A lot of my earliest writings are gone, sadly. Most of them were made in an old program called Storybook Weaver Deluxe that just doesn’t work on modern computers, not to mention all the files are gone. I do have a printed copy of one story I wrote though – Home Alone 4. And yes, it’s terrible, only focuses on the traps, and the traps make no sense.

    I’ve also got some action stories I wrote in middle school/early high school that pretty much rip off Mission Impossible, James Bond and an N64 game called Perfect Dark at the same time. They’re pretty much unreadable, not to mention they feature guns that are physically impossible. And I liked to use the word disintegrated a lot. I don’t think I actually knew what it meant at the time. I wrote 7 stories in that series back then, and it’s actually more painful for me to read now than that Home Alone sequel/ripoff.

    Also just a bit of advice on that writing sample you gave us. It’s good, but if you’re going to have a character’s line and an action in the same sentence, you don’t need to say [insert name] said between them.

    Instead of – “You’re bleeding,” Lukas said and shoved the twisted life jacket away from Sol’s shoulder. His long fingers probed the wound. – try “You’re bleeding,” Lukas shoved the twisted life jacket away from Sol’s shoulder. His long fingers probed the wound.

    You still know it’s Lukas speaking and doing the action, so you don’t need the “Lukas said” description.


    1. Haha! I would write rip-offs of favorite movies and books when I was younger.

      Thanks for the writing tip – it’s actually very helpful (not all writing tips are, lol). When I go into the third draft, I’ll be sure to change that.


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